The most memorable experience I have when I graduated from Senior High School. The first, my parents invite me to Bandung. Next day, we went to Bandung by a car. There, we visited the kawah putih and strawberry gardens. I learned a lot of strawberries with my sister. Second, I got a new cellphone. it is the first cellphone that I have. I am really happy because the color is purple. Third, my mother made a little party to celebrate. She made a lot of cakes and foods that I like. Fourth, my father gave me a notebook because I get ranked third in my class. None of the four things that I can forget, because it's the beautiful thing that I have.
T : The most memorabel experience.
CI : when I graduated.
dear, your title has an incorect spelling..
BalasHapus'morable',
It should be 'memorable', I guess..
You have more than one experience in that story.
So, which one is the most memorable, Khae?
and..
I don't think so that senior high school is a proper noun; hence, I think it doesn't begin with capital letter ;)
If I do an error, correct me please... :)
Agree with Nabil. Yes dear, the title is important so, please avoid making mistake on that. It's understandable if Nabil asks "which one is the most memorable?". U can simply add "some memorable experiences" instead of using "the". By doing so, ur writing will be easily comprehended by ur audience.
BalasHapusanother g'd point from Nabil is also deaing with the use of proper and common noun. "Senior High School" should b written using small letters as it does not followed by specific place. By contrast, "kawah putih" should be capitalized since it refers to specific place. Be aware of using countable and uncountable noun too, the choice of words, and the grammar. "my parents invite me". According to ur sentence, ur parents live in Bandung. Do they really so, or they "asked" u 2 go thre? Em waiting 4 ur better writing product.