I have a friend. Her name is Ami. She likes listening to the music. She likes many kinds of music. She almost listening music in her leisure time. She has many songs in her laptop. She feels comfort when she listen the music. Sometimes she looks so bored, because she can’t listens to the music. Even though she likes the song, she feels difficult to remind the lyrics. Before she listen the music, she always tries to find out to the lyrics. So, listening music is very important for her.
Well Rani, please analyze the topic, controlling idea, and the concluding sentence. Once u justify the topic sentence, u can simply develop it into paragraph. My question is which one is ur TS? U write about 'listening music', but u do not say something on what kinda music Ami likes. Mind ur grammar, punctuation, and the choice of words. Do not interfere ur writing with ur Bahasa, e.g; the word laptop does not exist in English. Instead, we use the word notebook. Try to write as natural as second language writer does. Write better next time:-)
BalasHapus